Thread:Rh390110478/@comment-33032843-20190708201036/@comment-34595515-20190708221750

DarthSaiyan8697 wrote: Rh390110478 wrote:

DarthSaiyan8697 wrote: Rh390110478 wrote:

DarthSaiyan8697 wrote: Rh390110478 wrote:

DarthSaiyan8697 wrote: Rh390110478 wrote: DarthSaiyan8697 wrote: Rh390110478 wrote: DarthSaiyan8697 wrote: Rh390110478 wrote: DarthSaiyan8697 wrote: Rh390110478 wrote: DarthSaiyan8697 wrote: In case if you don't know why I have been so inactive lately and didn't reply to you after you announced that chapters 27 and 28 were released, it's because I went on a cruise to Mexico with my family. Nice! Hope you had fun! Anyways, enjoy reading the two chapters! Well, Mexico is great. I get to see the Mayan City of Chichen Itza in Yucatan and went scuba diving in Cozumel. At first, I was a little bit nervous that I might get stung by stingrays and attacked by large sharks such as Tiger Sharks and Bull Sharks during my scuba diving. I then became confident that they are not to be seen (unless I went deep underwater). Later in my dive, I can't stand the sea water in my mouth and nose due to the water leaking in the snorkel tube and the goggles. By the way, I just read chapters 27-28 already. Nice!

Yeah. Be careful with stingrays. You don't want to end up like Steve Irwin! True! I'll share you my thoughts on chapters 27-28.

Chapter 27- I liked when everyone invades the Meen Enterprises and searching for Sunny's heart in order to bring her spirit (Ghost Sunny) back to her body. Kung Fu Mario saves Zoe from Toro by locking him up after hitting his pressure points. Oof, Masked Menace/Denny screamed at Onion Cream after his mission to kill Sunny failed.

Chapter 28- I knew it! Onion Cream captured Denny and made him brainwashed! I knew it! I knew it! I knew it! I find it interesting when Alternate Rose talks about her past, which is kind of similar to Future Trunks talks about what happened in his timeline.

Hey dude, can you make a change of Kung Fu Mario fighting Toro in Chapter 27?

Zoe is seen looking through the lab.

Zoe: So far, all I see are some more experiments Masked Menace is doing.

Toro is seen emerging from an air vent.

Toro: I got you now!

Suddenly, a figure grabs Toro, pulls him back and throws him into a hallway. The figure is revealed to be a version of Mario wearing a straw hat and a jedi robe.

Kung Fu Mario: I saw you trying to attack that girl. I see you need a lesson for that.

Toro: Fine! I’ll kill you too!

Toro lunges at Kung Fu Mario, but he puts both his index and middle fingers on Toro’s temples, causing him to become immobilized.

Toro: The f***?! I can’t move!

Kung Fu Mario: I struck a hidden pressure point called Touya (头亜). Your body will move by my orders.

Toro: What?!

Kung Fu Mario raises his arm in the air, causing Toro to get flung into the ceiling.

Toro: Ow!

Kung Fu Mario bends over, causing Toro to bend over as well.

Kung Fu Mario: You’ve been a bad tuna!

Kung Fu Mario spanks himself, causing Toro to start spanking himself and making him wail hysterically.

Toro: IT HURTS SO MUCH!

Kung Fu Mario leaps into the air and bangs his head against the wall, causing Toro to see the pain.

Toro: HOW ARE YOU NOT HURT?!?

Kung Fu Mario: Only a fool seeks meaning from a bowl of oatmeal.

Toro: Are you calling me a fool?!

Kung Fu Mario: No, a bowl of oatmeal.

Kung Fu Mario heads to a locker and locks himself in, forcing Toro to do the same with another locker. Kung Fu Mario then snaps his fingers and breaks out of the locker with a ninja sword. Toro however is still trapped in his locker.

Toro: Hey! Let me out!

Kung Fu Mario: Well, maybe now you learned your lesson about not fighting girls! See you sometime!

Kung Fu Mario enters a portal and it shuts.

Here's a reference video of Toa (a Japanese pronounciation of Touya): https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KZ9pfTzF3Go (note: Toan is a mispronounciation of Toa/Touya) What changes do I make? Wait, didn't you watched the video already? I watched it. How are these changes?

After spanking Toro.

Kung Fu Mario: Now, repeat after me.

After making Tako bang his head and calling him a bowl of oatmeal.

Kung Fu Mario: Now, enter this locker with me. Not bad, I just made a revision for it. Any revisions to make?

This is my change after I watched the video. Any revisions you want to make?

Zoe is seen looking through the lab.

Zoe: So far, all I see are some more experiments Masked Menace is doing.

Toro is seen emerging from an air vent.

Toro: I got you now!

Suddenly, a figure grabs Toro, pulls him back and throws him into a hallway. The figure is revealed to be a version of Mario wearing a straw hat and a jedi robe.

Kung Fu Mario: I saw you trying to attack that girl. I see you need a lesson for that.

Toro: Fine! I’ll kill you too!

Toro lunges at Kung Fu Mario, but he puts both his index and middle fingers on Toro’s temples, causing him to become immobilized.

Toro: The f***?! I can’t move!

Kung Fu Mario: I struck a hidden pressure point called Touya (头亜). Your body will move by my orders.

Toro: What?!

Kung Fu Mario: Jump into the ceiling.

Toro jumped into the ceiling as Kung Fu Mario told him to.

Toro: Ow!

Kung Fu Mario: Bend and spank yourself.

Toro bends over and then starts spanking himself, causing him to wail.

Kung Fu Mario: (sarcastic) You’ve been a bad tuna!

Toro: IT HURTS SO MUCH!

Kung Fu Mario: Bang yourself into the wall.

Toro leaps into the air and bangs his head against the wall, causing him to see the pain.

Toro: OOOWWWWW!!!

Kung Fu Mario: Only a fool seeks meaning from a bowl of oatmeal.

Toro: Are you calling me a fool?!

Kung Fu Mario: No, a bowl of oatmeal. Now, enter this locker for me.

Toro heads to a locker and locks himself in. Kung Fu Mario watches Toro and walks away from the locker where he (Toro) is trapped.

Toro: Hey! Let me out!

Kung Fu Mario: Well, maybe now you learned your lesson about not fighting girls! See you sometime!

Kung Fu Mario enters a portal and it shuts. Perfect! Any revisions you want to add? I think it's perfect! I'll add it once I release Chapter 29! Thanks dude. Hey Rh, will Sunny still have her original Iron Flower armor after Dr. Morpheus modified it to Iron Flower X? She will rebuild it in an epilogue. She will still use the Iron Flower X as secondary armor for when she decides to use it! I see. I heard that you made a character named Trace for your future story called A New World Order. Is she a Flower Person? 1. Sure did! She will be a flower person disguised as a mechanic. She will also help the others in defeating Mr. MacFroogle!