Thread:Rh390110478/@comment-33032843-20190924000056/@comment-34595515-20190925013742

MarioFan2009 wrote: DarthSaiyan8697 wrote: MarioFan2009 wrote: DarthSaiyan8697 wrote:

MarioFan2009 wrote:

DarthSaiyan8697 wrote:

Rh390110478 wrote: DarthSaiyan8697 wrote: Rh390110478 wrote: DarthSaiyan8697 wrote: Rh390110478 wrote: DarthSaiyan8697 wrote: It was frustrating in my opinion. It's like what if Zara is getting away from the police during the events of Lost Memories. As for Denny, he's somewhat like a punhing bag. I just wish Denny got caught, and then Sunny would tell Brooklyn Douche how Denny got brainwashed and show him the footage. For Denny's nane clear thing, that's INCREDIBLY dumb, stupid, and subpar in my opinion. 1. Well, Zara was only trying to avenge Jez and after finding out he was alive, she made up for her mistakes.

2. Rover 2.0 destroyed the footage, but I'm planning for his name to be cleared in AWR Part 3.

3. If Sunny did try to tell Brooklyn Guy, he most likely won't believe her due to how ridiculous and complicated it sounds.

Note: Even if you didn't like it, please don't be really honest about it. I tried at least. Oh yeah, forgot about that. Wow, Brooklyn Douche sounds like a douche to me after what you said. How would Brooklyn Douche react when I called him "Brooklyn Douche?" Also, I apologize for mad at reading this story. Somehow, I'm like a critic to this story. 1. Brooklyn Guy: Seriously? Brooklyn Douche? What did I ever do to him?

2. It's fine! Just next time, list some things that you were only confused about. 1. *Ahem* shows him a footage of Brooklyn Guy acting like an idiot to Denny.

2. Okay, one thing that confuses me is this: "Back in Sunny’s house, she is seen putting the Iron Flower panel and a new panel for the Iron Flower X suit in her closet." I was vague when I read it. 2. Well, both of the Iron Flower armors have a portable mode that cause them to turn into small tablets that allow Sunny to simply take one of them out while not at her house. I get your point. Hey dude, you came up with any lines for this yet?

Can you think of any lines for this?

SMZ Luigi: Go ahead and attack me. I'm ALL yours.

Denny tries to stab to SMZ Luigi with his sword, only for SMZ Luigi grab his wrist.

SMZ Luigi: Is that all you got?

[Insert Denny's line]

[Insert Sunny's line]

[Insert Tari's line]

[Insert Petra's line]

[Insert Meggy's line]

SMZ Luigi chops Denny's sword blade in half while holding Denny's wrist very hard, and he then releases Denny afterwards.

[Insert Sunny's line]

[Insert Tari's line]

[Insert Meggy's line]

[Insert Petra's line]

[Insert Denny's line after SMZ Luigi chops his sword]

SMZ Luigi: Well then, why don't you use your fists to fight, weakling?

[Insert Denny's line]

[Insert Denny's action or attack], only for SMZ Luigi dodges it easily.

[Insert Sunny's line]

[Insert Tari's line]

[Insert Meggy's line]

[Insert Petra's line]

SMZ Luigi: NOW, IT'S MY TURN!!!!

[Insert Denny's line]

SMZ Luigi starts rapidly punching Denny, and later he delivers kicks at Denny.

[Insert Sunny's line]

[Insert Petra's line]

Denny, who is brutally beaten up by SMZ Luigi, starts breathing tiredly.

SMZ Luigi: What's wrong? You said the fight between you and me will be legendary? If it will be legendary, then I have to use my full power.

SMZ Luigi holds Denny's arm and starts crushing it.

Denny: AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRGGGGH!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Insert Sunny's line]

[Insert Meggy's line]

[Insert Tari's line]

[Insert Petra' line]

SMZ Mario: Oh no...

SMZ Luigi breaks Denny's arm and then bends it.

[Insert Denny's line]

'''SMZ Luigi grabs Denny's neck and throws him at the wall. He points at Denny with his index and middle fingers and fires five green fiery energy rings at him, thus making Denny's arms, neck, and legs restrained. Denny can feel burning pain from SMZ Luigi's energy rings, due to it is made from fire and ki.'''

[Insert Denny's line]

[Insert Sunny's line]

[Insert Tari's line]

[Insert Petra's line]

SMZ Mario: Wait, isn't that the technique you used on me?

SMZ Luigi: Of course it is, Celleran.

SMZ Luigi walk towards Denny.

SMZ Luigi: So how does it feel like if you're against a warrior like me?

[Insert Denny's line]

SMZ Luigi: Well then, allow me to show you... MY WRATH!!!!

[Insert Sunny's line]

[Insert Tari's line]

SMZ Mario: Oh no, Luigi...

SMZ Luigi starts punching and kicking at the Restrained Denny like a punching bag.

[Insert Denny's line]

[Insert Sunny's line]

[Insert Tari's line]

[Insert Meggy's line]

SMZ Luigi: How does it feel like when you're about to die?

[Insert Denny's line]

SMZ Luigi: Good... NOW, SAY GOODBYE!!!!!

SMZ Luigi uses Dirty Fireworks at Denny by pointing at him with his middle and index fingers, thus blowing Denny up and killing him.

SMZ Mario: Luigi...

[Insert Sunny's line]

[Insert Tari's line]

[Insert Petra's line]

[Insert Meggy's line]

SMZ Luigi frowns with his arms crossed.

SMZ Luigi: See you in hell, you weak bastard.

[Insert Sunny's line]

SMZ Mario: Luigi! Why would you kill him?! You know he will be redeemed by her!

SMZ Luigi: Humph! Only fools like you, Celleran, and that Flower Girl believed in redemption. Can't you tell that this psychopath is pure evil and was about to kill her?

[Insert Sunny's line]

[Insert Meggy's line]

[Insert Tari's line]

[Insert Petra's line]

SMZ Luigi: Whatever, Celleran and I will tell your allies that this psychopath is already dead.

[Insert Sunny's line]

'''Sunny, SMZ Mario, SMZ Luigi, and the others leave before they will defeat the remaining villains. The scene transits Sunny at her home mourning the death of Denny.'''

[Sunny's line]

However, the entire story is actually a comic read by the Redeemed Denny.

[Insert Denny's line]

END 1. Ok, first of all, I actually found this story good. You didn’t needed to be a critic about this.. you could have just stayed silent about it or could have discussed it in private.

2. And second of all.. “sigh” please stop spamming that alternative ending of Denny being killed.. (it doesn’t matter if it’s a comic. It’s starting to annoy me looking at that popping up every single time.) At this point, I'm acting like a retard. Don’t say that. Why? Because you are better than this. You shouldn’t jump to conclusions instantly because of one simple mistake. You can always improvise and fix things. You’re not a retard. I know you are intelligent. True. Like when I did the original ending for The Rabbit. After MF2009’s response for it, I came up with a better ending and managed to improve later on! I can still do mistakes in stories sometime, but I improve on them!